May I present the third part of my ongoing story, Along the Rails. I've included the children's names and ages, but have not counted those details in each 33 word piece as this information is not in their voices.
Two previously-written pieces of this story are here and here. Eventually I'll figure out how to post them as a permanent list, assuming I continue to hear Terry's journey in my head.
I've missed you all, and missed the writing. But these days it is hard to hear anything, the external noises come so fast and furious. Life with family, right?
The Trifextra Challenge of the week:
Your task, should you choose to accept, is to take a scene that involves (or affects) at least three people. You should then write this scene from the point of view of three of the characters, using 33 words for each character.
Along the Rails -- The Arrival
Terry (age 9):
The house looks abandoned, Pete, look. The mail's piled on the porch; she’s not here.
It's definitely auntie’s though. We're here.
I'll head 'round back, find a way in. Keep care of Frannie.
Pete (age 7):
The screen door is loose, banging. Creepy. The house is dark -- maybe haunted. Man I’m hungry.
I’m NOT going in, Terry.
Frannie, hold my hand.
Shhhhh, Frannie. Wait.
This is stupid.
Frannie (age 4):
You’re squishing my hand, stop squeezing so hard, you always squeeze so hard.
Petey, I don’t wanna wait. Where’s Terry?
You’re squeezing too hard.